Padme/Anakin Love Scene Rewrite Contest - WINNERS
We have a sackful of great excuses as to why it took us so long to announce the results of our Revenge of the Sith love scene rewrite contest - but rather than go through the drudgery of ennumeration, wouldn't you rather we just announce the bloody winners?
First, congratulations to the the runners-up: David Ritchie, Evan Reynolds, Thoman L. Strickland, and Garrett Fasano. And the grand prize winner is ...
Anna Siri! Her full-length submission is after the jump.
Thanks to all who entered. If you're one of the lucky five winners, please contact us at cinematical@gmail.com with your PayPal information.
INT. CORUSCANT-PADME'S APARTMENT-TWILIGHT
PADME stands in the balcony brushing her hair. ANAKIN leans against
the wall, watching her lovingly.
PADME
---and I want to have our baby on Naboo, where our family can live in
peace. Why are you staring?
ANAKIN
I'm making up for lost time. Those unbearably long days protecting
the Outer Rim---I missed you.
PADME
And? Do I look different?
ANAKIN
(protesting)
Oh, no, Senator. You're too good with words. I'm a Jedi---I know
when I'm walking into a trap.
PADME
Serves you right for falling in love with a politician.
Anakin shakes his head in disbelief.
ANAKIN
Who would believe it? You're a Senator and I'm---
He falters.
PADME
What? Annie?
ANAKIN
(serious)
I'm yours.
PADME
Mine? You're not worried about enslaving yourself to a public
servant, my Jedi knight?
ANAKIN
It's only to you, Padme. Only to you.
END SCENE
First, congratulations to the the runners-up: David Ritchie, Evan Reynolds, Thoman L. Strickland, and Garrett Fasano. And the grand prize winner is ...
Anna Siri! Her full-length submission is after the jump.
Thanks to all who entered. If you're one of the lucky five winners, please contact us at cinematical@gmail.com with your PayPal information.
INT. CORUSCANT-PADME'S APARTMENT-TWILIGHT
PADME stands in the balcony brushing her hair. ANAKIN leans against
the wall, watching her lovingly.
PADME
---and I want to have our baby on Naboo, where our family can live in
peace. Why are you staring?
ANAKIN
I'm making up for lost time. Those unbearably long days protecting
the Outer Rim---I missed you.
PADME
And? Do I look different?
ANAKIN
(protesting)
Oh, no, Senator. You're too good with words. I'm a Jedi---I know
when I'm walking into a trap.
PADME
Serves you right for falling in love with a politician.
Anakin shakes his head in disbelief.
ANAKIN
Who would believe it? You're a Senator and I'm---
He falters.
PADME
What? Annie?
ANAKIN
(serious)
I'm yours.
PADME
Mine? You're not worried about enslaving yourself to a public
servant, my Jedi knight?
ANAKIN
It's only to you, Padme. Only to you.
END SCENE
Reader Comments (Page 1 of 1)
6-16-2005 @ 4:19PM
Man said...
Just like the movie, after all the wait I expected a little more. But still it was still good.
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6-16-2005 @ 4:19PM
Sean McCarthy said...
I suppose this entry succeeds on its own terms, in the sense that it attempts a very modest level of difficulty.
The original scene (#73) really does not offer much in the way of dramatic development, characterization, or conflict. It's essentially a set-up for the "premonition of Padme's death" scene which follows it, rather than a scene in its own right.
I can't help but think that the winning entry should have taken on something with a little more weight to it.
But maybe I'm just bitter that I and my collaborator did not win, after hacking it out through the toughest scene in the bloody script!
I mean, seriously...Nadia Comaneci can probably turn a pretty tight somersault, but no one gave her a medal just for that!
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6-16-2005 @ 4:19PM
Doug said...
You should give the awardee a copy of FINAL DRAFT, so she can get the formatting correct next time.
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6-16-2005 @ 4:19PM
DLub said...
Doug -- You're a moron. It's a great scene, who cares about the stupid formatting. This winning scene's perfect and a helluva lot better than the one I saw in theatres (twice, sadly). Oh, and Doug? You're a moron.
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6-16-2005 @ 4:20PM
Doug said...
DLub: Fuck yourself, you irredeemable shitblower.
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6-16-2005 @ 4:20PM
DLub said...
Doug -- Clearly, your mastery of the English language far exceeds the winner's, so you can obviously coherently comment on anyone else's writing with the authority and credility you've earned.
Since you're a moron, I'll spell it out for you -- screw you and go get a life. Just get up from your computer / PSP / porno collection, go upstairs and ask your Mom what one is, if you're confused.
And why do I bother? Because morons like you shouldn't be insulting real, talented writers.
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6-16-2005 @ 4:20PM
Doug said...
Thanks, DLub. I enjoy helping the mentally-challenged whenever I can.
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