Read This: Rejected 'Twilight' Script

Here's something I bet you didn't know: Some of us who write for Cinematical also enjoy a variety of other similar gigs. Like, for example, Patrick Walsh (who used to write for us) now writes episodes of It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia ... and Scott Weinberg (who still writes for us) likes watching Philadelphia Eagles games for some odd reason when he's not contributing to this site. Then there's the fabulous Eric D. Snider, who, over on his personal site, has posted his rejected Twilight screenplay -- as in, the one Summit Entertainment didn't turn into a box office behemoth. You can check out the complete script over at Snider's site, but here are two snippets (read one below and one after the jump):

Scene 2

BELLA: It's tough being the new kid in school! Especially when everyone is so friendly and helpful and interested in me. Why can't they just leave me alone so I can sit in the corner and cut myself?
CLASSMATE: You're awesome, Bella!
BELLA: See what I have to put up with? Hey -- who are those hot people over there?
CLASSMATE: Those are the Cullens. They avoid direct sunlight, they don't eat food, they sleep in coffins in a graveyard, and holy water burns them. I think they're Canadians.
BELLA: They sure are spectacularly gorgeous.
CLASSMATE: Yes, they are.
BELLA: I mean seriously, those people are BEAUTIFUL. Especially the one who keeps looking at me. Man alive, that guy is stunning. I mean, wow. He is hot buttered seduction on a stick. I'm not interested in him sexually, of course, because sex is dirty, but wow -- LOOK AT HIM! Yee-ikes! Hubba hubba! If you don't mind, I'd like to spend the next 75 pages talking exclusively about how attractive he is, and then bring it up again every paragraph or so for the remaining 400 pages.
CLASSMATE: Knock yourself out.

Continue to Scene 3 after the jump ...

Scene 3

EDWARD: Hi, I'm Edward. I'm every girl's fantasy boyfriend: moody, humorless, violent, capable of snapping your spine with my bare hands, liable to do creepy things like watch you while you're sleeping, but also really cute.
BELLA: There is something strange about you.
EDWARD: (recoils at her garlic breath) I don't know what you mean.
BELLA: I just can't put my finger on what it is.
EDWARD: (lifts automobile with one hand) You're imagining things.
BELLA: I feel like you're hiding something from me.
EDWARD: (grabs passing rabbit with lightning speed; drinks rabbit's blood) Don't be silly!
BELLA: It's like you're different somehow.
EDWARD: (turns into bat; flies away)
BELLA: Hmm. I bet he's gay.

So what do you folks think? Did they go with the right screenplay in the end, or is Snider's adaptation ten times better?